Thread: A Snipet From My Script

sequence is supposed to run as the credits roll on the screen.
The genre is romantic thriller.

The name of the script:

WELL KEPT PEOPLE

ESTABLISHING SHOT

Clear blue early morning sky.

EXT.PLUSH NEIGHBOURHOOD/SOMEWHERE IN LAGOS-MORNING

The camera cranes down slowly to reveal a high brow street with trees along both sides in a bird's eye panoramic view.
The camera pans to the right to and an ultramordern highrise appartment block comes into view.
The camera zooms in to a particular window of a flat on the 7th floor until we are seing the inside through the see through and halfdrawn curtains.

DISSOLVE TO:

INT.BEDROOM/FLAT/APP.BLOCK-MORNING

The camera pans across the room revealing a very mordern and tastefully furnished room.
The camera stops as a big bed comes into view.On top lies a man,face down in the pillows and his right arm hanging down the side of the bed,his hand toudching the thickly rugged floor.The hanging arm twitches.
The camera creeps towards the bedside table,focusing on the clock on it.The time says 06:59.

DISSOLVE TO:

INT.LIVINGROOM/FLAT/APP.BLOCK-MORNING

The digital clock on the hifi stereo receiver comes in to view(close shot).It reads 06:59.
The digital clock changes to 07:00 and the receiver comes to life as it switches to early morning radio program on the FM station filling the room with soft music.
The camera moves back revealing the whole room(wide shot)luxuriously and tastefully furnished like the bedroom.

CUT BACK TO:

BEDROOM

The sound of the music coming from the livingroom filters into the bedroom through the open door.
The camera focuses on the man on the bed(medium shot).His hanging arm twitches again.He lifts his head and turns it so that he is facing away from the camera.

CUT TO:

EXT.STREET/PLUSH NEIGHBOURHOOD-MORNING

The camera is looking down on the street(HIGH WIDE ANGLE SHOT)making out 2 approaching cars at some distance away from the block.
The camera cranes down to the street level as the two cars reach the block and turn into the parkinglot in front of it.CUT TO:

EXT.PARKINGLOT/FRONT OF APP.BLOCK-MORNING

A tall powerfully built man in an immaculate 3 piece dark suit and spotting a dark shaded specs, steps out of the bigger car,a merc 500S.
Another man,smaller in stature and also wearing an equally dark and 3 piece suit,steps out of the smaller car,a silver met.AUDI TT.The car has a red-blue ribbon tied around it from side to side.He walks over to the bigger man.
The bigger man takes out his cellphone and punches in some digits before putting the phone to his ear.

CUT TO:

INT.BEDROOM/FLAT/APP.BLOCK

The phone on the bedside table rings.The man on the bed stirs.The phone rings again.He lifts his and turns to the phone,squinting.The phone rings again.
He gets up,rubs his eyes,looks at the clock,07:03,then picks the phone.
He is in his early 20s with boyish goodlooks.His name is WALE

WALE

(on phone;drowsily)

Who is this?

VOP

Good morning,Mr Wale Adefarati.It is a lovely and special morning.

WALE

Oh yeah?What's so special about it and who the hell are you?

VOP[/SIZE]

You don't know me sir,but i know you

.

Rubs his eyes.

WALE

(suspiciously)

How did you get this number?

VOP

From a very special person close to you,sir.Today is saturday the 26th of august,does that ring a bell,sir?

He looks at the calender above the bedside table.

WALE

It's my birthday!

VOP

Correct,sir!If you would just step on the balcony,there is a little something for your eyes only

.

A moment hesitation.He gets up

WALE

Alright!

He walks barefooted out of the bedroom taking the cordless phone with him.The camera goes with him.

LIVINGROOM/FLAT

He walks to the curtains and draws them revealing the sliding door.He unlocks it and slides it open.

EXT.BALCONY/FLAT

He steps on to the balcony,the camera staying with him.He looks down at the parkinglot and he sees two men (POV)looking up at him.The bigger man is standing by the small coupe looking up at him,cellphone to his ear.

VOP

Happy birthday sir!

The man stretches his hand at the coupe.

VOP

(contd)

Your birthday present!

WALE

(on phone;excited)

You are shitting me!!

VOP

I shit you not,sir!Too early in the morning for that sort of thing.This is courtesy of madame!

WALE

(very excited now)

WOW!!DAMN!......i'm coming down!

He switches off the phone and leaves the balcony,his actions more hurried now.The camera moves with him.

INT.LIVINGROOM

He hurriedly puts on a pair of sneakers and heads for the door without putting anything on to cover his body.He has on only his pyjama trousers.He closes the door behind him.

EXT.PARKINGLOT

The bid man is now leaning on the merc,whistling.The smaller man lights a cigarette.

SMALL MAN

(puffing on his cigarette)

Lovely morning,don't you think.

BIG MAN

[Cs)[/CENTER]

That it is,that it is!

Wale comes out of the block and heads towards the 2 men.

WALE

(smiles widely)

Good morning,gentlemen!Sorry about my rather gruffy talk on the phone!

BIG MAN

(smiles)

That's ok!We understand that.It is too early in the morning for good moods and manners.

He looks at the coupe.

WALE

So this is for moi!

SHORTMAN

That is correct.It is brand new.Please take a closer look.

Wale moves closer to the car and runs his fingers along the bodylines.

WALE

It is a thing of beauty!You know,i completely forgot that today is my b-day.

BIGMAN

Madame obviously didn't.She's been planning this for quite a while.

SHORTMAN

Here are the keys(handing Wale the car keys).The particulars are in the car.I understand you have a driver's license?

WALE

Yes i do.

BIGMAN

Maybe you want to take a test drive?

WALE

(shakes head)

Not right now.How about you guys coming up to my place and let me offer you something to drink.

BIGMAN

(shakes head)

We will very much like that,but we do not have much time on our hands.We have other business to attend to.

WALE

I see.....well,i'll call MD later to thank her.

SHORTMAN

No she will call you later in the morning.She told us to tell you that.She is not in the country right now.

The big man stretches his hand at Wale.

BIGMAN

I guess we'll be on our way.Have a good time with the ride and once again,happy birthday!

Wale grips his hand,grinning.

WALE

Thank you very much.

He shakes the other man too.
The two men get into the big merc,they wave at him and drive out of the lot unto the street and they are gone.Wale waves after them.
He turns now his attention to the coupe as he begins to walk around it.He opens the driverside door.

INT.CAR

He climbs in the car cabin,runs his fingers along the dash,the seats and the gear stick.He sticks the key in the ignition and starts the engine.He smiles.

WALE

(to himself)

Music!!

He closes the door,eases into gear and drives around the lot.

WALE

(laughing excitedly)

Damn!Eat your heart out,guys!

He stops at the entrance of the parkinglot,kind of blocking the way.

EXT.PARKINGLOT

He gets out of the car,leaving the door ajar.He walks to the other side and opens the passenger door wide.He goes down in a crouching position and stares at the inside of the car as if in a trance(LOW MEDIUM SHOT)
The camera cranes up slowly to reveal a porsche boxster at the entrance of the lot.The entrance is blocked by the AudiTT.Wale could not see the car.
The glass pane of the porsche's driderside door winds down to reveal a stunningly beautiful young lady in her early 20s.
She stares at the car blocking her way for some seconds before she honks.Wale jumps up and sees the car at the entrance and the lady driver.

LADY

(pointing at the car)

Do you mind?I'd like to get in before nightfall.

WALE

(smiling embarrassingly)

I'm so sorry...i did not realise i was in the way....i'll move...(closing the door and hurrying to the other side)

LADY

Thank you!

Wale slides into the driver seat,starts the engine,closes the door and reverses into the lot proper and then finding a parking space.
The lady drives in and parks at a little distance from him.Wale emerges from his car carrying the car documents.He locks the door and heads for the other car.The lady has just stepped out of her car and locking it when he reaches her.

WALE

(smiling apologetically)

That really was stupid of me!Very sorry.

She looks at him.She is almost as tall as he is,wearing a jugging outfit that reveals a spectacular figure.

LADY

Do you always daydream so early in the morning?

WALE

(laughing)

It is the car,you see!Had me in a trance.It is my birthday present!

LADY

(glancing at the audi)

I see!Nice toy!

She turns and begins to walk towards the block entrance.Wale hurries after her.

INT.FRONT OF LIFT/FOYER/APP.BLOCK-MORNING

She walks to the elevator with Wale behind her.She presses the button to call the lift.

WALE

Eeem,you live here?

LADY

(turning to look at him)

Yes,i do.And you?

WALE

Yes,me too...i have never seen you here before.

LADY

I've never seen you before!

WALE

I moved here a month ago.

LADY

That explains a lot.I'm an older tenant than you are.Not always around,though.I travel a lot.

WALE

I see!

A "ting" sound and the elevator door opens.She steps in and he follows her...

INT.ELEVATOR/APP.BLOCK

She presses the number 7 button.

WALE

I see we are floor neighbours!I live on the 7th floor too.

LADY

(smiles)

How nice!

WALE

(offering his hand)

I am Wale.My friends call me Wally.

LADY

(shakes his hand)

IFEOMA.My friends call me IFFY.

WALE

(points at her)

I see you went out jugging

IFEOMA

I like to jug anytime i get the chance.

She is looking at his unclothed body.

IFEOMA

(contd)

You always go about without a shirt on,or you just like showing off?

He looks at himself as if for the first time and laughs.

WALE

The birthday car did that too!

The elevator stops.The door opens and she steps out.He follows...

INT.CORRIDOR/7th FLOOR

She looks at him smiling.

IFFY

Nice meeting you,Wale.Park your car in the right place next time!

WALE

I'll remember that,and nice meeting you too,Iffy.

She turns and walks down the corridor.

WALE

(at iffy)

Eeem...Iffy....if you need anything....(pointing down the corridor,his direction)flat number 4.

IFFY

(turning to lookt at him)

OK!!

Wale continues to stare at her walking backwards down the corridor.He can see her stopping and opening a door of the flat almost at the end of the corridor(POV)
She pauses to look at him,an amused expression in her face.

IFFY

(laughing slightly)

Do you always walk backwards like that?

WALE

(smiling)

Only when i see something as stunning as you.

She laughs and dissapears inside her flat.He hears the door dloses and then turns around and walks to his flat door...

INT.LIVINGROOM/FLAT

He closes the door behind him,kicks off his sneakers,drops the car documents on the center table and heads out of the room.The music is still playing from the hifi system.

INT.KITCHEN/FLAT

A large and well equipped affair.He fills the kettle with water,switches on the electric cooker and places the kettle on it.He leaves the kitchen.

BACK TO:

LIVINGROOM

He drops on the couch,picks the car manual from the table and begins to browse through it.The doorbell rings.He looks at the door,drops the manual,gets up and heads for the door.
He opens it and sees Iffy standing at the doorway with an empty glass jar in her hand.

IFFY

(raising the glass jar in front of her)

Do you have some sugarcubes to spare?

WALE

(smiles and takes the jar from her)

Ofcourse!Please come in!

She steps into the room.She has changed to a baggy khaki shorts and a big blue T-shirt.She looks around her.

IFEOMA

Hmmm,nice place!

WALE

Thank you!I'll go get the sugarcubes,just make yourself comfortable.

She nods.He hurries out of the room.We stay with her.She spins around taking in the entire livingroom.
At that moment,the radio dj starts to play "Beautiful girl" from OLA&SHOLA.She starts to sway slowly and sensuously to the midtempo rhythm of the song.

CUT TO:

INT.KITCHEN/FLAT

Wale fills the jar to the brim.He closes the jar and heads out of the kitchen.

CUT BACK:

LIVINGROOM

Ifeoma is still moving ever so sensuously and smoothly to the rhythm of the music.She has her back to the kitchen entrance swaying to the beat.."ah,ah,ah..beautifull girl".
Wale is standing at the kitchen doorway,leaning against the doorsill,staring at her as if hypnotized.She has her back turned to him,unaware that he is watching as she continues to sway to the beat.She eventually swings slowly around and sees him watching her.A smile plays on her lips as she continues her dance without missing a step.She starts to sway towards him.She reaches him and takes the jar from his hands without stopping her dance.

WALE

(in hushed voice,shaking his head)

You are beautiful!I have never seen a girl like you.

She dances away from him without saying a word,just a slight smile on her lips.The track ends and she stops her dance.

IFFY

I just love that track!It is my absolute fav.

WALE

Mine too!I have it,would you like to listen to it again?

IFFY

(shakes her head)

Enough dancing for today.(she holds up the jar)Thanks for the cubes....very generous!!

WALE

That's ok!I've got lots of them!

A pause,then she moves towards the door.He follows her,reaching her as she opens the door.

WALE

Iffy...look...eem...i'd like to ask you....

She places a lond finger on his lips,stopping him from completing his sentence.She shakes her head slightly and smiles.

IFEOMA

Thanks for the sugar,Wale!Very nice of you!Bye!

She slips through the door closing it behind her.He places his head against the door and stays like that for sometime.

WALE

(to himself)

You are wellcomed,beautiful.Very wellcomed.

At that point,the phone rings.He turns from the door and goes to pick it.

WALE

(on phone)

Hello!

VOP

Hello,sweetie!

WALE

(excited now)

Hello,MD!!I've received my present!Aaaaww,you're too much!

VOP

You love it?

WALE

Do i love it?!I'm hypnotized by it.It is a beautiful piece of machinery!I absolutely love it!

VOP

Glad to hear that my baby is happy.I'm in Paris right now....God wish i was back home with you celebrating your birthday,darling.It is really boring here...

WALE

It's allright,MD.We will celebrate properly when you get back.You've already made my day with the Audi.

VOP

I'll be back by tommorrow evening.

WALE

Do you want me to meet you at the airport?

VOP

Not necessary.I'll call you when i reach town,ok.We'll go to a restaurant of your choice and have us a ball.And then we will end the day in you know what fashion

WALE

(laughing)

That sounds like great fun!I can hardly wait.

VOP

Gotta run,darling!See you later and please drive carefully with that thing,ok.

WALE

I will,MD!

VOP

Tata!!

The line goes dead.He hangs the phone and goes back to the couch,picking the car manual....